Monday, August 29, 2011
Blast from the Past #397: Re: April 15, 2004: 72 second draft and April: 15, 2004 Re: Super Hero turtle designs outstanding
Subj: Re: 72 second draft
Date: Thursday, April 15, 2004 11:13:41 PM
From: Peter Laird
To: Lloyd Goldfine
The heading of this email -- referring to Ep. 72 -- confused me, but only for a moment.
I read the latest draft of 74, and I really like it. I think it's got the potential to be one of our best episodes yet. In fact, I have only one small problem, and am willing to defer to Stan's opinion -- if he thinks it's okay, then it's fine by me. The problem is the following:
*They DO say clothes make the man, ninja rabbit! Oh, the shame!"
While I have no problem with Leo teasing Usagi, the way he does it here strikes me as a bit odd. His use of the phrase "clothes make the man" is kind of weird, as NEITHER of them are men. Perhaps I am being overly literal, but it just strikes me as strange. Here's a possible alternative:
*They DO say clothes make the ninja, Usagi! Oh, the shame!"
But, as I said earlier, if Stan okays it, then let it be done. Good job!
Subj: Re: FW: Super Hero turtle designs outstanding
Date: Thursday, April 15, 2004 10:00:29 PM
From: Peter Laird
To: Lloyd Goldfine
Maybe your recent computer misadventures are responsible, but can you please confirm that the models listed below are in fact approved (or not)?
PS – Rumor has it that we’re on for the next 13 episodes!!! We better get crankin’ on a story arc!!! ;D
Super Sliver – revised and resent Monday, 4/5
Blobboid – revised and resent Monday, 4/5"
I looked through my pile of faxes and could not find any of the ones mentioned. Could somebody fax them again?
I did get some more today, which I will comment on:
Team Commonpov rider -- approved
Utrominator -- looks nothing like what I was expecting, but I like it! Approved.
Hun and Stockman -- almost there, but I'm not crazy about the angle at which the Stockman part is tilting. I'd like to see it more or less straight up and down. I also had an idea when looking at this design -- I wonder if it would be cool if instead of a simple glass jar on one side, we used a "u"-shaped glass jar which would be about half the height of the one in the current drawing, but which would go around BOTH sides of Hun's head -- almost like a yoke (symbolic!) -- so that Stockman's brain could move from one side to the other to add some animation coolness... and increase the "annoying pest" factor for Hun. I will try to do a sketch and get it off to you shortly.
Raph with eye patch -- I like about half of this one. If we lose the pants and boots (and is that a t-shirt? if so, let's lose that too), I could approve it. And while I can live with the eye patch, I have to say that I really like to steer clear of this cliche whenever possible, and with that in mind, let me offer a possible alternative: What if we had the traditional TMNT bandana, but over the damaged eye, the eyhole in the bandana is sewn shut (with raggedy stitches)? Might look creepy.
Leo, scarred -- I like this one, but again, no pants, please. Also, how are those glasses going to stay on his head? Are they connected in the back?
Shredder's Presidential Palace -- I think having the Shredder have the title "President" is a bad idea, but the drawing is fine.
April, rebel -- This is okay, though I think she should have a sidearm or a smallish submachine gun (Uzi or Mac-10 type) on a sling. Also, it's curious that there are front and rear views, but the rear looks like regular April!