Blast from the Past #397: Re: April 15, 2004: 72 second draft and April: 15, 2004 Re: Super Hero turtle designs outstanding

Subj: Re: 72 second draft
Date: Thursday, April 15, 2004 11:13:41 PM
From: Peter Laird
To:   Lloyd Goldfine

Lloyd, 


The heading of this email -- referring to Ep. 72 -- confused me, but only for a moment.


I read the latest draft of 74, and I really like it. I think it's got the potential to be one of our best episodes yet. In fact, I have only one small problem, and am willing to defer to Stan's opinion -- if he thinks it's okay, then it's fine by me. The problem is the following:

"147. *LEONARDO
(teasingly)
*They DO say clothes make the man, ninja rabbit!  Oh, the shame!"

While I have no problem with Leo teasing Usagi, the way he does it here strikes me as a bit odd. His use of the phrase "clothes make the man" is kind of weird, as NEITHER of them are men. Perhaps I am being overly literal, but it just strikes me as strange. Here's a possible alternative:


"147. *LEONARDO
(teasingly)
*They DO say clothes make the ninja, Usagi!  Oh, the shame!"


But, as I said earlier, if Stan okays it, then let it be done. Good job!


-- Pete

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Subj: Re: FW: Super Hero turtle designs outstanding
Date: Thursday, April 15, 2004 10:00:29 PM
From: Peter Laird
To:   Lloyd Goldfine


"Hey Pete,

 Maybe your recent computer misadventures are responsible, but can you please confirm that the models listed below are in fact approved (or not)?

 Thanks mucho!

 Lloyd

 PS – Rumor has it that we’re on for the next 13 episodes!!!  We better get crankin’ on a story arc!!!  ;D


 Shellectro
 Graviturtle
 Super Sliver  – revised and resent Monday, 4/5
 Blobboid – revised and resent Monday, 4/5"



Lloyd,


I looked through my pile of faxes and could not find any of the ones mentioned. Could somebody fax them again?


I did get some more today, which I will comment on:


Team Commonpov rider -- approved

Utrominator -- looks nothing like what I was expecting, but I like it! Approved.


Hun and Stockman -- almost there, but I'm not crazy about the angle at which the Stockman part is tilting. I'd like to see it more or less straight up and down. I also had an idea when looking at this design -- I wonder if it would be cool if instead of a simple glass jar on one side, we used a "u"-shaped glass jar which would be about half the height of the one in the current drawing, but which would go around BOTH sides of Hun's head -- almost like a yoke (symbolic!) -- so that Stockman's brain could move from one side to the other to add some animation coolness... and increase the "annoying pest" factor for Hun. I will try to do a sketch and get it off to you shortly. 


Raph with eye patch -- I like about half of this one. If we lose the pants and boots (and is that a t-shirt? if so, let's lose that too), I could approve it. And while I can live with the eye patch, I have to say that I really like to steer clear of this cliche whenever possible, and with that in mind, let me offer a possible alternative: What if we had the traditional TMNT bandana, but over the damaged eye, the eyhole in the bandana is sewn shut (with raggedy stitches)? Might look creepy.


Leo, scarred -- I like this one, but again, no pants, please. Also, how are those glasses going to stay on his head? Are they connected in the back?


Shredder's Presidential Palace -- I think having the Shredder have the title "President" is a bad idea, but the drawing is fine.


April, rebel -- This is okay, though I think she should have a sidearm or a smallish submachine gun (Uzi or Mac-10 type) on a sling. Also, it's curious that there are front and rear views, but the rear looks like regular April!


-- Pete